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On Dialogue and Comma Splices
I've been reviewing my trusty guide Self-Editing for Fiction Writers by Renni Browne and Dave King. *If you're a writer and you don't have a copy, go. Get. One. Now. You won't regret it.* I'm a multi-tasker (aren't all moms?) so I was reading on Dialogue while looking up Proper Punctuation Usage in the web. My internal editor has been kicking in lately and I just have to get these things out of the way before I resume writing.
Last year, a very competent writer friend (I respect her command of grammar) pointed out to me my use of comma splices in dialogue.
*Comma Splice: the use of a comma to join two independent clauses where the clauses are not connected by a conjunction, semicolon, or period. Example:
I have a monkey, he likes to play with me.
By the rules of proper punctuation, this should be:
-with a semicolon: I have a monkey; he likes to play with me.
-with a period: I have a monkey. He likes to play with me.
-with a conjunction: I have a monkey and he likes to play with me.
(I really don't have a monkey, in case you're wondering, but my Grandpa did when he was alive. Needless to say, he was a super cool grandpa.)
Okay, now that we've established that, let's look at what Self-Editing has to say about making Dialogue less formal and less stilted (pp.101-102):
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Another helpful technique is to use sentence fragments. Consider this exchange:
"Is she pregnant?"
"It doesn't matter whether she is or not. She's not going to marry him."
It sounds much less formal--and more like real speech--if you edit it to read:
"Is she pregnant?"
"Doesn't matter whether she is or not, she's not going to marry him."
In the second exchange, the writer has used another technique (in addition to the sentence fragment) to good effect: the two sentences in the answer to the question are strung together with a comma instead of the (grammatically correct) period. If not overused, this technique captures the rhythms of real speech remarkably well.
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I think the key here is in the last sentence of above passage: If not OVERUSED. Grammarians will still balk at seeing comma splices in dialogues, but for us lesser beings, this is good enough proof that it can be acceptable. As long as we don't overuse it.
As with all things in life, aim for balance. Listen to your gut. Keep yourself true to the voice of your story.
Happy writing!
P.S. If you have any questions, enlightenments, disagreements, and rantings about above topics, please feel free to comment below. I'll try to answer as best as I can (armed with Google, Strunk and White, and Self-Editing for Fiction Writers).
Thursday, April 21, 2011
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- Precy Larkins
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5 comments:
I would like to have met your grandpa. He sounds delightful! :) Great tips, my learned friend. Thanks for the reminders on those. And I need to look into this book. Sounds like a great one to have for reference or polishing up on forgotten rules of yore. Har
We were scared of the monkey. My grandpa, who was balding, would let the monkey groom him. It was funny. We used to give the monkey candies until he got sick and we got in trouble. My grandpa's been gone for over ten years. He was my first loss and I was devastated. He was very nice and loving. No crankies at all.
Oh, the dreaded comma splice. College writing 101 kicked my butt. I got my first paper back and had to research what a comma splice was. I'd never even heard of one. My high school also didn't touch upon passive voice.
Though first classes were a hard lesson. I read Hacker's guide a hundred times, but still I'm convinced every other sentence I write has a comma splice in it. At this point I'm thinking it's paranoia.
When I'm writing dialogue, I tend to worry about voice over rules. I can always fix it up later, but I want the voice of my characters to come first. :)
Great examples here - it's always easier to follow with examples :)
Even in narration, when I want my specific voice to be heard, I'll use a comma splice now and then, for example, "You live, you learn" or "And good luck with that endevour, that's for sure." The comma splice is perfect for the pacing I want there. And, yes, once in a while I'll use a comma splice in dialogue as well, but also very sparingly, as I do think that, for the most part, it should be avoided.
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