Unlike movies, we don't have CGI-created visuals to accompany us when we're reading a book. We have to rely on our good, old noggins to supply us with images. Especially when we're reading Sci-fi/Fantasy, or anything that falls under the Speculative Fiction genre.
The thing with worldbuilding is that it's all too easy to fall into the old info-dumping technique. You're the Creator of your world, and of course you want to acquaint the reader with its grandeur so at the very first instance, you bombard us with several long paragraphs detailing every hill, castle, and hybrid creatures existing in your creation.
Um, not good. You'll run the risk of putting your readers in snooze town.
Or you can go the other way: You skimp on the worldbuilding descriptions to allow for a fast pace read.
Erm, not good either. If we find ourselves scratching our heads, then it means you've lost us. How the heck are we supposed to know what a
kipa is, and why does your character keep saying "sika!"? (Those are actual words found in my MG Fantasy WIP. :D )
There has to be balance. The aspects of your world should be interwoven within the scenes and around your characters' actions. A sentence here or there explaining certain things will not bore your reader (as opposed to huge blocks of descriptive text).
Here's an excerpt from my MG Fantasy WIP:
Ascan opened his eyes too fast and
stars blinked in and out of his periphery. Seagull wings flapped overhead in
frenzied beats as a couple of fishermen hauled in their half-empty net. Men
groaned even as they began to haggle for prices.
“Pan! Pan de sal!” This came from a
pudgy man carrying a woven basket on his shoulder. Ascan had only been in
Dagatur for a week but he’d already learned a few necessary words in the
strange, lilting language of the fishing folk. Pan was bread. Not gutted fish, not slimy octopus legs, not bitter
sea kelp.
Real doughy bread. Ascan’s mouth
watered.
A horn tooted, signaling the arrival
of another ferry boat. A boy, half Ascan’s size, scampered by him. The beggar
kids who’d been busy harassing the fishermen for a centi all morning long scattered and disappeared, sweeping the
docks clean of their filthy rags. Ascan squinted at the incoming boat, noting
the insignia fluttering in the wind. A W
encased in chains.
The Watchers.
Ascan crept toward a group of buyers
vying for a bucket of pint-sized squid. He would be safe enough in a crowd, if
no one notices him. And lately, no one had noticed him—his ghostly hollow self
flitting around the docks on wobbly legs. It had been three days since he last
ate a stolen meal.
In Dagatur, the slave trade
flourished where the fish did not. Stowaways washed over the harbor with every
tide, and stowaways usually meant orphans. A long time ago, it was said that
the Watchers cared for the orphans during the great War, housing them in
sanctuaries, and teaching them so they could be brought up in useful trades
until they come of age. But the War had long ended, and now, the only trade
they were brought up for was one that involved scrubbing rich fat men’s
backsides, serving them their meals, and blubbering yeses like flustered hens.
8 comments:
wow! that excerpt leaves me wanting MORE!
Balance is absolutely key in Worldbuilding.
Great excerpt!
Great excerpt. World building is tricky, that's for sure.
I love your excerpt. Fantastic imagery!
My favorite part of planning a story (who am I kidding, I love all of it). The best way to combat the infodump is to stick with your surroundings. No need to write it if it's not in the scene. :)
Doesn't everyone know what a kipa is? Well, every MOTT does.
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Lovely post.
All I write is speculative fiction. I love world building and revealing something new about a fantasy world in every chapter.
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